Improvements :)

Hi!
I first really loved the story planning option. I was a little unclear about the idea that if we did not love our story and the next week we fell in love with one, if we could do that story instead and scratch the other one! If that makes any sense... I never used it to do extra research, more just to plan out and straighten up my thoughts as I would come up with so many ideas the more I planned!

I also liked the idea of the themes! It could be cool to see the whole story of some of the Gods and characters, rather than bits and pieces over many weeks! Maybe it would be cool so if instead of Love Stories, it could be "Zeus" and have all of the stories over him and his life.

I really enjoyed both of these ideas :)

Week 14 Storyplanning

This week I read Eve's Unequal Children by D.L. Ashliman.
-This story is over Adam and Eve with a twist

Adam and Eve Source

-Adam worked the field at the house that they built while Eve gave birth to children every year
-Dang in the story the ugly kids made up 12 of her children!
-Some were beautiful and some were ugly.
-LOL yeah story of my life
-The Lord said he was going to come by for a visit
-Can you imagina how nervous you would be?!
-Eve hid the ugly children and put on display her beautiful children
-The Lord came and blessed the beautiful children with wonderful futures
-Makes sense
-Eve brought in the ugly children to be blessed and the Lord blessed them too
-He blessed the ugly children with poor jobs and futures.
-Poor kids:(
-Eve asked why and the Lord say because everyone has a job to make the world work basically!
-She apologized for questioning his word and the children were stuck with the jobs

For this story, similar to my storybook, I think it would be fun to make this from the Lords perspective or from a child's perspective. I think that it would be good to get it from one of the ugly kids view as they have it harder than the beautiful one! OHHHH IDEA!! I think it would be so fun to write this from the future and have it set at like a family reunion where they all come together later in life and recount this story and how the Lord blessed them all. Then we could see how they turned out and I could make the beautiful children unhappy with poor personal lives and the ugly kids have beautiful large families, and loved by all. This would show beauty and money isn't everything, which I think we could all use a lesson on today!

Week 14 Reading Notes Part B

This week I read Eve's Unequal Children by D.L. Ashliman.
-This story is over Adam and Eve with a twist

Adam and Eve Source

-Adam worked the field at the house that they built while Eve gave birth to children every year
-Some were beautiful and some were ugly.
-The Lord said he was going to come by for a visit
-Eve hid the ugly children and put on display her beautiful children
-The Lord came and blessed the beautiful children with wonderful futures
-Eve brought in the ugly children to be blessed and the Lord blessed them too
-He blessed the ugly children with poor jobs and futures.
-Eve asked why and the Lord say because everyone has a job to make the world work basically!
-She apologized for questioning his word and the children were stuck with the jobs

Week 14 Reading Notes

This week I read Rumpelstiltskin by D.L. Ashliman

Shrek and Rumpelstiltskin Source

`A man wanted to impress the king so he lied and said his daughter could spin straw into gold.
`The daughter was taken into a room and she cried because she could not do it
`If she did not do it he said he would kill her
`A little man came in and kept striking up deals with her to the point where she promised to give him her first child
`When she had a kid, he came to collect and he said if she guessed his name she would not have to pay.
`after 3 days of not being able to figure it out she got it right and he killed himself.

Week 13 Story Planning Post: Cinderella! Cinderella!

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane

Cinderella Source

I chose this story as my ALL-TIME favorite princess is Cinderella. I go to Disney around once a year and no matter how many times I go I still get so excited to meet her.

Aschenputtel-German Cinderella
It would be cool to incorporate the German roots
-Cindy's mom died and she went to the grave all the time
In the original we never got to hear from the mother so it could be cool to write this from beyond the grave.
-The new wife had 2 daughters, who were evil and took away Cindy's things
Evil Stepsisters!! In this story they are beautiful though??
-They made her life so hard
-Her dad went out and she asked for the first twig to hit his hat
In the end of this story the dad is not very nice to her so I would make him consistently nice throuhout the story since it doesn't make sense for her dad to hat her.
-She went to her mothers grave and planted the twig so that it would grow
-A bird would grant her wishes while at the grave
How cool is this!! This is like her helpful mice from the original!
-A dance was among them but she was forbidden to go unless she finished chores
-The wishful bird helped her clean
-Then she had nothing nice to wear
I like how in this story it is not that the sisters destroy her clothes, she simply doesn't have any.
-She went to the grave and the bird dropped her a beautiful gown
-She went to the ball and the Prince fell for her
This is where the story gets a little weird...I would stick to the original and have the stepsisters try to make their feet fit, and she can runaway as it is a multi night ball, but not to disappear into the pigeon house!
-She disappeared into the Pigeon House
...To be Continued

Week 13:Extra Reading Notes

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane.
This is the Part 2 of my first notes.

Cinderella Source

On the 3rd day Cindy went to her mothers grave again and asked for a beautiful dress.
The bird gave it to her and the prince told everyone that she was with him.
She ran away at midnight and he put sticky stuff on the stairs
Her shoe stuck to the floor and so he picked it up
The mom made the 2 evil stepsisters cut off parts of their feet to fit in the shoe.
The prince saw the blood and said they were not the right girl.
He went back and the father said that he had one other daughter but she was gross
The prince insisted and the shoe fit!
They went off and at the wedding the birds poked out the stepsisters eyes!

Week 13 Reading Notes

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane

Cinderella Source

I chose this story as my ALL-TIME favorite princess is Cinderella. I go to Disney around once a year and no matter how many times I go I still get so excited to meet her.

Aschenputtel-German Cinderella
-Cindy's mom died and she went to the grave all the time
-The new wife had 2 daughters, who were evil and took away Cindy's things
-They made her life so hard
-Her dad went out and she asked for the first twig to hit his hat
-She went to her mothers grave and planted the twig so that it would grow
-A bird would grant her wishes while at the grave
-A dance was among them but she was forbidden to go unless she finished chores
-The wishful bird helped her clean
-Then she had nothing nice to wear
-She went to the grave and the bird dropped her a beautiful gown
-She went to the ball and the Prince fell for her
-She disappeared into the Pigeon House
...To be Continued

Week 12 Reading Notes: Celtic

I chose to read Dogs by Christopher Smart this week. I love dogs and so I thought this was a perfect one to write over!
I personally found these fables hard to read and to understand, but I tried my best!
The first fable is about The Faithful House-dog
Basically a man placed a trap for a dog and tried to bribe the dog to fall for it with food.
The dog was not fooled and he got away
The man asked him inside, hence the house dog.

Personal Photo 2016

The next fable an old dog was loyal to his master and would hunt with him
The dog was so old however that he could not keep hold of the latest kill.

Week 11 Story Planning Post

I chose to write a remake version of the classic tale of The Three Little Pigs by Joseph Jacobs.





I think it would be really fun to write this as though it was from the wolf, but the wolf isn't a bad guy he just wants to have lunch WITH the pigs. Another idea for this is to make it more from the pigs point of view! OH the wolf could be bad still but make it from his point of view and he tells of how he is so disrespected and he can't go into town to get food or anything.

This story is the traditional story of 3 pigs who were set off to survive for themselves

Piglets Source

~One chose to make a house out of straw
a wolf came and said "little pig little pig let me come in"
he replied "no no by the hair of my chinny chin chin"
the wolf blew his house down and ate the pig
I would chose to write this out and he only got mad because everyone in town was so afraid of him so he was forced to eat them-maybe by like a spell or something? Or the wolf explains how he is wanting to talk to the pig but once again is denied and so he eats him.
 
~one chose to make a house out of Furze (kinda reminds me of a rose bush with spikes and flowers)
the wolf came and said the same thing
the pig said no and he ate him
Once again the wolf would explain that he wanted to simply talk with the pig but he refused. and he didnt mean to blow his house down it was a miscommunication!

~the third pig built a house out of bricks
the wolf came and when the pig said he couldn't come in, he couldn't blow the house down.
Since the wolf couldn't use his typical tactic he thinks what if we met in a public place and he suggests the turnip field

The wolf tried to trick him and told him they would go and get turnips at 6
At 5 the pig went and got some turnips which made the wolf mad
He was stood up! he just wants to talk and it is getting so twisted and out of hand!
The pig tricked him about going to a fair the same way
He is finally fed up with getting stood up and said that he was going to come back to his house one last time
The pig put a pot of water underneath the chimney and boiled the wolf when he came down
The pig refused to open the door even though he knew the pig was in there so he went in through the roof and his last words were "why is everyone so afraid of me"
He lived happily ever after
The wolf did not live happily ever after lol
I could have an excerpt of like "five years late" and the pig is telling the story to his kids! Like tell us again how our uncles died...

Week 11 Reading Notes Part B

This second story is Henny-Penny by Joseph Jacobs

This story is loosely like chicken little
A hen named henny-penny was eating corn one day and something hit her head from the sky so she went off to tell the king that the sky was falling
she gathered up a lot of other fun named friends along the way
they came up to a fox and he said that they were going the wrong way and to follow him
the fox led them to a cave and said to come in one at a time
he killed all of them
one of them didnt die right away and got to warn henny-penny and so she ran home
she never told the king the sky was falling

Henny-Penny Source

Week 11 Reading Notes

I chose to write over the classic tale of The Three Little Pigs by Joseph Jacobs.

My all time FAVORITE animal is the pig, I have been obsessed since I got some beanie baby pigs when I was 6 months old crying on an airplane. I still have them to this day!
This story is the traditional story of 3 pigs who were set off to survive for themselves

Piglets Source

~One chose to make a house out of straw
a wolf came and said "little pig little pig let me come in"
he replied "no no by the hair of my chinny chin chin"
the wolf blew his house down and ate the pig
~one chose to make a house out of Furze (kinda reminds me of a rose bush with spikes and flowers)
the wolf came and said the same thing
the pig said no and he ate him
~the third pig built a house out of bricks
the wolf came and when the pig said he couldn't come in, he couldn't blow the house down.

The wolf tried to trick him and told him they would go and get turnips at 6
At 5 the pig went and got some turnips which made the wolf mad
The pig ricked him about going to a fair the same way
The pig put a pot of water underneath the chimney and boiled the wolf when he came down
He lived happily ever after

Storytelling: The 5 Dogs

Bea Lewis
March 29, 2017
Creative Writing 2325

The 5 Dogs

5 Puppies Source

              Once upon a time there was a village settled in current day Oklahoma. This was a very special and strange village named Kayak.  In Kayak lived many families, however one in particular contained a nice family of a mom, dad, and daughter, this family had a very beautiful dog as well. This dog was very attached to the daughter, whose name was Jenna. Jenna and the dog, Jake, were the best of friends and every night they slept together. Now every night, this dog would transform into a man      (told you this village was strange) and once Jenna became of age, the human Jake and Jenna would sleep together at night to which she fell pregnant. Poor Jenna began to show a bump and her father was outraged. Even worse, her father found out who the true father was. He was so angry he decided to kill the beloved dog/human, Jake. Even worse than killing Jenna's lover, her parents abandoned her and burned everything down so she was left with nothing.

             

 An old neighbor who always had a soft spot for Jenna gave her a match and told her where to find a place to build a fire. This old woman led her to a nice barn and months later Jenna gave birth to 5 lovely puppies. These puppies, while cute, were rambunctious and since Jenna had 4 boys and 1 girl she barely had a hold on them. It is hard to raise 5 children, let alone 5 children of a different species so Jenna worked multiple jobs to support them all. Everyday Jenna would hear giggling and laughter as she left the house! So one day she hid and peered through a window once the puppies believed she was gone. What she saw blew her away; her 5 puppies were now 5 small children! Jenna stormed back in, yelling at the children for hiding this from their mother for so long. Rather than use this anger as a reason to be angry, she channeled it into teaching the young boys how to hunt. 

Many years later and the boys were the best whale hunters she had every encountered. They would drag in the whales to the little town they had built for themselves and have feasts. Jenna's only daughter learned how to sew from her mother and would create beautiful dresses. After a while the old woman came back to see how the family was doing and saw all of the whale meat available. The new town that everyone ran too after Jenna became pregnant was struggling. So the old lady went back to her town and told everyone of the prosperous Kayak and convinced everyone to move back. Everyone was so impressed with the boys hunting talents that they made them all chiefs and made the only daughter a princess. The town went back to normal, the parents apologized for their behavior and they lived happily ever after.

Bibliography: This story is The Dog-Husband  by Stith Thompson, originally from Tales of the Northern American Indians.

Authors Note: This story was originally about a young girl who fell pregnant by a dog/human and an old crow led her to the place to make a fire. I found it a little too weird for all of the neighbors to be part animals so I made it an old woman! I chose to write it as if it was written for another class and put a heading on top!

             

Reading Notes: Native Americans Part B

This week I chose to read Myths and Legends of Alaska told by Inuit storytellers.

I chose to read the story The Orgins of the Wind

Walrus Source

-A man and his wife had no children
-the man carved a doll out of wood he found from a beautiful lonely tree
-the man made fur clothes for this doll
-they honored the doll and took care of it
-the doll came alive and they saw his eyes move
-the doll went missing
-the doll went towards the light that led the man to the tree
-the doll cut holes in the sky to create wind
-after the doll continued to cut holes to make the wind he went back to the village

Reading Notes: Native American Part A

This week I chose to read Myths and Legends of Alaska told by Inuit storytellers.

Funny polar bear Source

I chose to take notes over the first story: The creation of the Raven

-it sounds like a man basically cracked from an egg?
-His egg was hanging from a Beach Pea vine
-He drank water?
-A raven came and flew to him
- PLOT TWIST THE RAVEN CHANGED INTO A MAN
-The raven is confused as he has never seen someone like him before
-He repeatedly asks where the man just came from
-the raven is the one who planted the beach vine or so he says
-The raven leaves for 4 days and comes back with 4 berries he has made.
-The man eats them!
The raven then makes some mountain sheep along with some reindeer
-The raven then makes some wild reindeer
-The raven then decides that the man will be lonely and makes for him out of clay a beautiful girl.

Week 9 Storyplanning: The 5 Dogs

This story is The Dog-Husband  by Stith Thompson, originally from Tales of the Northern American Indians.



For planning out this story I have an idea to write it from the parents point of view, or maybe write it from the one female puppy point of view!
I originally chose this story because it revolves around a dog and I pictured my cute pup as the character! After reading the story not so much LOL!

My dog Jake. Personal Photo 2013

-Girl has a dog best friend that sleeps with her
This is weird, I may change it to a human that the parents just do not like! And the kids look like the dad so the parents leave
-In the night the dog turns into a man and sleeps with her
Equally weird and illegal...
-She falls pregnant
-Her father kills the dog:(
I would change this to the father just bans his daughter from seeing the bad boy again as killing him is a little intense
-Her family abandoned her out of shame and left her to die
I was confused as to why she would die...like does she not know how to care for herself? In any case I will make this happen
-A crow took pity and gave her coals between a clam
I will make Crow and old nice neighbor who lives next door!
-When they crackled they led her to a fire
Again I wasn't sure why this was so vital, maybe the neighbor gave her cash for a motel for a little bit?
-She gave birth to 5 puppies
She will give birth but to human children, they will just look like their dad
-She kept hearing singing so she investigated and found that the puppies turned into humans when she went to work
Oh this could be tricky, maybe when their mother is not around they will turn into nice proper young kids and they are very difficult for their mother
-She scolded the puppies and forced them to stay human
-She raised them as human children and taught them to hunt
The good kids could be amazing hunters and this is their secret talent!
-The boys hunted whales and were really good at it
-Crow came back and saw the whales and told the village
The old woman neighbor was coming back to check on the kids as she always wondered what happened to them. OH! I could do the story from the neighbors point of view!
-The village moved back and the boys were made Chiefs
I would keep this but I would include the only girl and make her the tribe princess!

Reading Notes: Native American Part B

For part B I read The Rolling Head by Stith Thompson.

Holding a pet snake Personal Photo

-A man lived with his wife and 2 kids

-Every morning he would draw her

-She went to fetch water because a snake told her too

-The paint washed off as she went to the lake day after day

-The man stayed back one day and killed the snake and the wife

-He fed her meat to the children

-The wife's head rolled toward the children

-The head told the kids what they did

-the kids went off but were protected by animals

I was not a fan of this story as I was honestly just creeped out by it! I will not write my story off of this one, I will do it off of the story from Monday!

Reading Notes: NAtive American Part A

This story is The Dog-Husband  by Stith Thompson, originally from Tales of the Northern American Indians.


I originally chose this story because it revolves around a dog and I pictured my cute pup as the character! After reading the story not so much LOL!

My dog Jake. Personal Photo 2013

-Girl has a dog best friend that sleeps with her
-In the night the dog turns into a man and sleeps with her
-She falls pregnant
-Her father kills the dog:(
-Her family abandoned her out of shame and left her to die
-A crow took pity and gave her coals between a clam
-When they crackled they led her to a fire
-She gave birth to 5 puppies
-She kept hearing singing so she investigated and found that the puppies turned into humans when she went to work
-She scolded the puppies and forced them to stay human
-She raised them as human children and taught them to hunt
-The boys hunted whales and were really good at it
-Crow came back and saw the whales and told the village
-The village moved back and the boys were made Chiefs

Week 8 Growth Mindset

Inspiration Source

Through this class I have definitely found out some strengths and weaknesses in myself. Although I have also found myself growing and maturing already through not only this class, but through life in general! I used to be so defensive about my mistakes and I think through both maturity and time I have found myself okay with my mistakes. I also find it much easier to take responsibility and apologize. One thing I am still needing to work on it doing the bare minimum for not just class, but in my sorority and other aspects of life. I have started to workout and let's just say I am not the athletic type. I have a fairly slender build naturally, but I could not run more than a mile to save my life. I always figured since I never have before, I couldn't now. How wrong I was! I have only been working out for a few weeks and already I can run a few miles without stopping! This is just a testament to how changing your view can seriously change your outcomes!

Week 8 Reflections

My favorite flower, Rannuculus Source

When reading back through my reading notes, I was happy with them as even though they may be short, they work perfectly for me! I would however like to work on my stories as I would like to work on conversations in them. I have a hard time writing out conversations with all of the grammar rules that go with it. I would also like to try a timeline or diary- like entry for my story as I have seen many people do this and I love reading them!

I am super happy I chose to do a storybook for my project! I love my idea and think that I could make it really fun and  personal as I can explore different ways of writing! I feel pretty good about my feedback, although everyone does such a great job there is not much for me to critique! I love getting feedback as well so I always enjoy going back and reading through my own comments!

Reading Notes: Africa (Congo) Part B

This week I read The Three Brothers from the African Unit. This story is by Richard Edward Dennett and came out of Congo!

Three Boys Source

 -This story starts off with a woman who gives birth to triplets! (Oh my sweetness!)
-The woman decided she could not take care of them so she sets them in tall grass and walks away (seriously?!)
-The babies somehow survive the newborn stage and as toddlers go exploring for food.
-The come across a bounty of food, including bananas, but are afraid to eat it!
-The are situated next to a river and the River Spirtit tells them that it is okay to eat and that they should.
-The 3 boys eat the food and love it!
-Because they have found food they are able to grow up strong and build houses
-The river spirit gives them wives and so eventually the 3 brothers create a town as they reproduce!
-One day a man stumbled upon the town and PLOT TWIST! ITS THE BOYS FATHER!
-The father runs back to their mother and tells them he found them, but she cannot go the entire way to see them
-The brothers now stumble upon a woman (their mother) and go off to kill her!
-The River spirit saves their butts again and tells them that she is their mother and to protect her and nurture her!
-The boys nurture her and they live together in the town!

-This would be a fun story to write about this week if I wasn't already writing the one I planned for last week! Bummer!