Week 14 Storyplanning

This week I read Eve's Unequal Children by D.L. Ashliman.
-This story is over Adam and Eve with a twist

Adam and Eve Source

-Adam worked the field at the house that they built while Eve gave birth to children every year
-Dang in the story the ugly kids made up 12 of her children!
-Some were beautiful and some were ugly.
-LOL yeah story of my life
-The Lord said he was going to come by for a visit
-Can you imagina how nervous you would be?!
-Eve hid the ugly children and put on display her beautiful children
-The Lord came and blessed the beautiful children with wonderful futures
-Makes sense
-Eve brought in the ugly children to be blessed and the Lord blessed them too
-He blessed the ugly children with poor jobs and futures.
-Poor kids:(
-Eve asked why and the Lord say because everyone has a job to make the world work basically!
-She apologized for questioning his word and the children were stuck with the jobs

For this story, similar to my storybook, I think it would be fun to make this from the Lords perspective or from a child's perspective. I think that it would be good to get it from one of the ugly kids view as they have it harder than the beautiful one! OHHHH IDEA!! I think it would be so fun to write this from the future and have it set at like a family reunion where they all come together later in life and recount this story and how the Lord blessed them all. Then we could see how they turned out and I could make the beautiful children unhappy with poor personal lives and the ugly kids have beautiful large families, and loved by all. This would show beauty and money isn't everything, which I think we could all use a lesson on today!

Week 13 Story Planning Post: Cinderella! Cinderella!

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane

Cinderella Source

I chose this story as my ALL-TIME favorite princess is Cinderella. I go to Disney around once a year and no matter how many times I go I still get so excited to meet her.

Aschenputtel-German Cinderella
It would be cool to incorporate the German roots
-Cindy's mom died and she went to the grave all the time
In the original we never got to hear from the mother so it could be cool to write this from beyond the grave.
-The new wife had 2 daughters, who were evil and took away Cindy's things
Evil Stepsisters!! In this story they are beautiful though??
-They made her life so hard
-Her dad went out and she asked for the first twig to hit his hat
In the end of this story the dad is not very nice to her so I would make him consistently nice throuhout the story since it doesn't make sense for her dad to hat her.
-She went to her mothers grave and planted the twig so that it would grow
-A bird would grant her wishes while at the grave
How cool is this!! This is like her helpful mice from the original!
-A dance was among them but she was forbidden to go unless she finished chores
-The wishful bird helped her clean
-Then she had nothing nice to wear
I like how in this story it is not that the sisters destroy her clothes, she simply doesn't have any.
-She went to the grave and the bird dropped her a beautiful gown
-She went to the ball and the Prince fell for her
This is where the story gets a little weird...I would stick to the original and have the stepsisters try to make their feet fit, and she can runaway as it is a multi night ball, but not to disappear into the pigeon house!
-She disappeared into the Pigeon House
...To be Continued

Week 11 Story Planning Post

I chose to write a remake version of the classic tale of The Three Little Pigs by Joseph Jacobs.





I think it would be really fun to write this as though it was from the wolf, but the wolf isn't a bad guy he just wants to have lunch WITH the pigs. Another idea for this is to make it more from the pigs point of view! OH the wolf could be bad still but make it from his point of view and he tells of how he is so disrespected and he can't go into town to get food or anything.

This story is the traditional story of 3 pigs who were set off to survive for themselves

Piglets Source

~One chose to make a house out of straw
a wolf came and said "little pig little pig let me come in"
he replied "no no by the hair of my chinny chin chin"
the wolf blew his house down and ate the pig
I would chose to write this out and he only got mad because everyone in town was so afraid of him so he was forced to eat them-maybe by like a spell or something? Or the wolf explains how he is wanting to talk to the pig but once again is denied and so he eats him.
 
~one chose to make a house out of Furze (kinda reminds me of a rose bush with spikes and flowers)
the wolf came and said the same thing
the pig said no and he ate him
Once again the wolf would explain that he wanted to simply talk with the pig but he refused. and he didnt mean to blow his house down it was a miscommunication!

~the third pig built a house out of bricks
the wolf came and when the pig said he couldn't come in, he couldn't blow the house down.
Since the wolf couldn't use his typical tactic he thinks what if we met in a public place and he suggests the turnip field

The wolf tried to trick him and told him they would go and get turnips at 6
At 5 the pig went and got some turnips which made the wolf mad
He was stood up! he just wants to talk and it is getting so twisted and out of hand!
The pig tricked him about going to a fair the same way
He is finally fed up with getting stood up and said that he was going to come back to his house one last time
The pig put a pot of water underneath the chimney and boiled the wolf when he came down
The pig refused to open the door even though he knew the pig was in there so he went in through the roof and his last words were "why is everyone so afraid of me"
He lived happily ever after
The wolf did not live happily ever after lol
I could have an excerpt of like "five years late" and the pig is telling the story to his kids! Like tell us again how our uncles died...

Storytelling: The 5 Dogs

Bea Lewis
March 29, 2017
Creative Writing 2325

The 5 Dogs

5 Puppies Source

              Once upon a time there was a village settled in current day Oklahoma. This was a very special and strange village named Kayak.  In Kayak lived many families, however one in particular contained a nice family of a mom, dad, and daughter, this family had a very beautiful dog as well. This dog was very attached to the daughter, whose name was Jenna. Jenna and the dog, Jake, were the best of friends and every night they slept together. Now every night, this dog would transform into a man      (told you this village was strange) and once Jenna became of age, the human Jake and Jenna would sleep together at night to which she fell pregnant. Poor Jenna began to show a bump and her father was outraged. Even worse, her father found out who the true father was. He was so angry he decided to kill the beloved dog/human, Jake. Even worse than killing Jenna's lover, her parents abandoned her and burned everything down so she was left with nothing.

             

 An old neighbor who always had a soft spot for Jenna gave her a match and told her where to find a place to build a fire. This old woman led her to a nice barn and months later Jenna gave birth to 5 lovely puppies. These puppies, while cute, were rambunctious and since Jenna had 4 boys and 1 girl she barely had a hold on them. It is hard to raise 5 children, let alone 5 children of a different species so Jenna worked multiple jobs to support them all. Everyday Jenna would hear giggling and laughter as she left the house! So one day she hid and peered through a window once the puppies believed she was gone. What she saw blew her away; her 5 puppies were now 5 small children! Jenna stormed back in, yelling at the children for hiding this from their mother for so long. Rather than use this anger as a reason to be angry, she channeled it into teaching the young boys how to hunt. 

Many years later and the boys were the best whale hunters she had every encountered. They would drag in the whales to the little town they had built for themselves and have feasts. Jenna's only daughter learned how to sew from her mother and would create beautiful dresses. After a while the old woman came back to see how the family was doing and saw all of the whale meat available. The new town that everyone ran too after Jenna became pregnant was struggling. So the old lady went back to her town and told everyone of the prosperous Kayak and convinced everyone to move back. Everyone was so impressed with the boys hunting talents that they made them all chiefs and made the only daughter a princess. The town went back to normal, the parents apologized for their behavior and they lived happily ever after.

Bibliography: This story is The Dog-Husband  by Stith Thompson, originally from Tales of the Northern American Indians.

Authors Note: This story was originally about a young girl who fell pregnant by a dog/human and an old crow led her to the place to make a fire. I found it a little too weird for all of the neighbors to be part animals so I made it an old woman! I chose to write it as if it was written for another class and put a heading on top!

             

Week 9 Storyplanning: The 5 Dogs

This story is The Dog-Husband  by Stith Thompson, originally from Tales of the Northern American Indians.



For planning out this story I have an idea to write it from the parents point of view, or maybe write it from the one female puppy point of view!
I originally chose this story because it revolves around a dog and I pictured my cute pup as the character! After reading the story not so much LOL!

My dog Jake. Personal Photo 2013

-Girl has a dog best friend that sleeps with her
This is weird, I may change it to a human that the parents just do not like! And the kids look like the dad so the parents leave
-In the night the dog turns into a man and sleeps with her
Equally weird and illegal...
-She falls pregnant
-Her father kills the dog:(
I would change this to the father just bans his daughter from seeing the bad boy again as killing him is a little intense
-Her family abandoned her out of shame and left her to die
I was confused as to why she would die...like does she not know how to care for herself? In any case I will make this happen
-A crow took pity and gave her coals between a clam
I will make Crow and old nice neighbor who lives next door!
-When they crackled they led her to a fire
Again I wasn't sure why this was so vital, maybe the neighbor gave her cash for a motel for a little bit?
-She gave birth to 5 puppies
She will give birth but to human children, they will just look like their dad
-She kept hearing singing so she investigated and found that the puppies turned into humans when she went to work
Oh this could be tricky, maybe when their mother is not around they will turn into nice proper young kids and they are very difficult for their mother
-She scolded the puppies and forced them to stay human
-She raised them as human children and taught them to hunt
The good kids could be amazing hunters and this is their secret talent!
-The boys hunted whales and were really good at it
-Crow came back and saw the whales and told the village
The old woman neighbor was coming back to check on the kids as she always wondered what happened to them. OH! I could do the story from the neighbors point of view!
-The village moved back and the boys were made Chiefs
I would keep this but I would include the only girl and make her the tribe princess!

Week 6 Story Planning Post: The Hermits

For this week I read The Story of the Man Who Did Not Wish to Die by Yei Theodora Ozaki from Japanese Fairy Tales

-This story starts off by a man Sentaro whose name means millionaire, has no care in the world because he inherited an amount of money so he does not worry about a job or anything else
LOL this would be the freaking life! I could make his name something cool like Sintario so it includes the word SIN, just a fun idea!
-He wanted to live for a very long time and so he was going to live frugal.
Yeah right...
-He went on a hunt to find some hermits who had Elixir of Life
How did these hermits get the Elixir of life? They could have gotten it from an old witch or have stolen it and that is why they are hermits, as they have to hide from the cops! I could write it from one of their points of view.

-Nobody would tell him where to find this Elixir of life and so he went to a shrine and prayed for 7 days
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Hermits Caves in England Source

I would like to focus on these hermits with a Elixir of Life and talk about how they got it in the first place
Again I would like to mayeb make it so they got it from somewhere cool, but they are also not hardly living because they have to hide and this could create a problem for some of the members of the group. Like they wish they had never stolen it and just want to grow old and die.
-Maybe they could be super old too, but look very young and be kept in a cool basement or something in hiding
-Ohhh maybe I could do a story of the town he goes to where nobody ever dies! That would be cool to tell of the people who live there!
This would be a fun one to expand on as I could create a Utopia and it could be full of cool creatures and fun things, except that all of the people who reside there are at least like 200 years old! This could be fun although it would be more difficult to make into a story that twists back into the original one!
I think the best way to go for me is to write from the point of view of the hermits, where they got the Elixir of life, How they stole it, and where they hide now and how hard their life is because they are in hiding!

Week 5 Storytelling: Fish Out of Water

My friends and I Source

My story is an interesting one, my life has not been easy and it definitely has not been normal. My name is Blue, as in Blue Damselfish. I was born out of water and have somehow found my way back in it. Do not get me wrong, I have many friends in the ocean where I live, many who have great powers and owe me many favors, which you will see I use to my advantage later in the story. Speaking of story I guess I should start to tell you mine.

I am a Blue Damselfish, ironic isn't it? Being that I am trapped in a fishes body and stuck in the ocean. Well, turns out I am not stuck in the ocean nor a fishes body(under certain circumstances).
The story starts when one sunny day I was caught while I was swimming, on my merry way to go to the store to pick up some oil for my scales. Some old wretched net caught me of all things. I have prided myself on dodging such things and yet, here I was in some water in a little bag. The man that caught me was clearly poor, living off nothing and looked as though he hadn't eaten or washed in days. He took the rest of the fish he caught and myself to the trading post. When we get there he sold all of the fish...except for me. At first I was grateful, for I was not going to die at the hands of a butcher. Then I found myself questioning if something was wrong with me (besides what I already know). The man who caught me looks at me with fascination. Through the water I heard muffled words of beauty and something of a well.

I soon found out that the well I heard of would become my new home. He put me in the well and the next day left off to fish. When he was gone I tried to escape and flopped out of water and after about 30 seconds I felt a funny tingling in my fin...turned feet! I turned into the most beautiful woman I have ever seen, not that I have seen many. Thankful to this man in a twisted way for showing me my new talent I decide to help him out and clean up a bit around the place. After all it really was a mess. When I heard him come back I was startled and found myself back on the floor flopping as a fish! I flop my way back to the well as he walks in. The next day the man, whom I have named "puppy" cause of his puppy dog eyes, looks at me in awe. For he had stayed back, spied on me, and found out my secret! He took my fish body and threw it in the fire where we watched it burn! He should not have done that, as he now wants me to become his wife. He took me to a King to get his approval of the marriage, and in a sick twist of fate the King decided he would like to marry me as well. Puppy becomes very upset and I use my favors from my ocean friends I mentioned earlier to help Puppy complete all of his tasks the King gives him.

Crazy to think that all of this happened in the span of 40 days, and here I am about to walk down the aisle. I love the man standing at the alter and while it took some time, I am so grateful to him for catching me on that day. Who knows where I would be if he had not.


Authors note: I read this story and immediately fell in love with the idea of the story being from the fishes point of view. In the original story the author goes into much greater detail about the fisherman and the tasks he was given by the king. I chose to focus on the love story and her point of view as she was the main character in my opinion! I chose the Blue Damselfish as the fit was too perfect to pass up. Damsel in distress as the little fish was also a damsel in distress!

 Bibliography: This story is out of Fourty-Four Turkish Fairy Tales By Ignacz Kunos, The Fish-Peri.

Week 4 Story Planning: Fish Out of Water

 This story is out of Fourty-Four Turkish Fairy Tales By Ignacz Kunos

This story is basically a magic fish and yet a love story at the same time!

Beautiful Fish-Woman Source

-So a man's parents died and they kept hidden his fathers occupation of a fisherman

---Why was it kept hidden? Could make it to be a family secret or something?
-He found his fathers fishing net and decided to use it, as he was poor.

---Where did he find it? Maybe he went to an old storage unit for his family and ound it?
-He caught a fish so beautiful he couldn't bare to eat or sell it and it cleaned his house when he was away
-He secretly watched and found out that it was a secret maiden and threw the shedded fish skin in the fire
-News of her beauty spread and the king demanded to see her...cinderella-esque!

----Could tell it from the maiden’s point of view and tell of how she was originally turned into a fish…Like Beauty and the Beast except for she is the Beast?! This could be fun to expand on as if she was turned into a fish because she looked down upon fisherman

----The story could take place before she was caught and it could be more like oh shoot I’m caught, but at the same time she is just grateful to be out of the water and back into the human world so she thanks him by cleaning his house as she can only turn human for a few hours? Although this kinda reminds me of Shrek and Fiona!
- The king wanted her to be his wife and struck up a deal with the man, if he could build a palace with jewels and gold in 40 days he could have her back... I would end the story here on a cliffhanger possibly

----The story ends with………I now pronounce you Husband and Wife, but you don’t know which on she ended up marrying would be fun!! Although everyone would hate me...

Week 3 Story: My dad is a Celebrity

      It is an average day at Glendale Preparatory Academy; sunny with a slight wind as my stepdad and I pull into the parking lot. We stick out like a sore thumb in our Honda minivan compared to the other kids in my class, who not only drive themselves to school, but in their Maserati's and Porsche's no less. I have gone to school here ever since I was in 6th grade when my mom married my step-dad, who happens to be the Principal at this god forsaken compound of entitled brats...and yet, I feel like I need to prove myself to them. Ridiculous I know, but I am sick and tired of being taunted for not belonging. My real dad is none other than Pheobus Sun, as in the Hollywood golden boy or well...man...dad...person. That's where I got my name, Pheathon, which has only been another source of torment. My mom refuses to flash around the child support and puts it in a college and emergency fund for me. Unfortunately, this means that nobody believes me when I tell him or her who my father is. I have a plan though, after school today I am asking my mom if I can go and visit Dad this weekend for a quick trip and I will finally be able to prove to my classmates that I am one of them!
      
      "Mommmmm?!?!" I cry out as soon as I walk through the door, "I gotta ask you somethinggggg!" She rounds the corner with the dog, Cerberus, biting at her ankles, "What Pheathon? I'm busy trying to train this beast!" Off to a great start...
     
      Two days later, after some convincing, I find myself on an airplane flying to Beverly Hills to see my dad for the first time in almost four years. Nervous is an understatement, but I am here on a mission, get the Gold Ferrari...shouldn't be too difficult. The limo driver pulls up to the ENORMOUS mansion (which even that feels like an understatement) as a golden god-like man walks out the front door. "Hey son! Ha! No pun intended," Pheobus or well dad calls. "Hey dad," I say while we walk inside the house and make small talk. The first day went by without a hitch and so I decided to bite the bullet and get to the purpose of this trip. To save you guys the boring ways a teen gets what they want, the conversation went a little something like this... I started out with a little guilt, "Hey dad, I've missed you these past four years...shame you haven't come to see me..." to which he made up some excuses. I followed suit with "Yeah, well, a son needs his dad in his life and bullies are hard to deal with..." check and mate. Dad replied with, "I have no need to hide my son, what you do want, I will give you anything you wish." It was honestly easier than I thought! I ask for the gold Ferrari and since he must keep his word, he is forced to give it to me. Not to say that he doesn't warn me and give me rules. 
      
      "This engine is so big, even I have trouble handling it! And don't go into the next town over! And be sure not to go too fast or too slow- keep with traffic! And watch for red lights!" Blah blah blah...


The next day the papers read:

                      "Pheobus' Sun Son Dies in Fiery Crash"

                                  Firefighters put out a blaze Source  

Tragedy struck yesterday afternoon as Pheathon Sun crashed his dad, Pheobus Sun' gold   Ferrari on his way to Glendale, Arizona as his phone map showed.

Initial police reports show excessive spend played a factor.

Memorial times have yet to be released by the family.

      On the bright side, the kids from my school finally figured out that I wasn't lying about my lineage...on the dark side I am writing this story from wherever you believe dead people go. I can't go and give away all the secrets of the world!


Bibliography: This story is based off of Tony Kline, "Pheathons' Ride.
 
Authors note: I wanted to bring this story into modern day and focus on the reason he wants to drive his dad's chariot or in this case, a gold Ferrari and not focus on his death although I did pull parts from all of "Ovid's Metamorphoses" story lines. I had a lot of fun coming up with this story line and how it would all fit together! I am glad in the end I did not continue the story to go into detail of his death as I wanted this story to be one that didn't make you never want to read one of my stories again!

Week 2 Story Planning: True Life: My Dad is a Celebrity

Storyline Planning:

So Pheathon lives in Glendale Arizona with his mom and goes to an uppity private school, but all of his friends are wealthy and live in extravagant houses, while he only affords the public school because his stepdad is the principal there. He is going to prove to his friends that he does fit in as his dad is the golden Hollywood actor Pheobus Sun. Nobody believes him so he goes west to his dads home in Beverly Hills. His dad loves him and says he can have anything he wants and Pheathon asks to drive his Gold Ferrari. He wants to refuse, but he cant break his word so his maids open the gate. His son ends up crashing even though he warned him to stay off the highway and not go too slow or too fast as he needed to keep with traffic. Pheathon crashes and the car catches on fire and he dies. His dad is extremely upset as he feels it is his fault.

Gold Ferrari Source

 Character Planning:

Pheobus Sun- Celebrity parent, lives in Beverly Hills as Hollywood's top actor. Claim to fame is his bleach blonde hair and golden skin. Son comes and asks to drive gold Ferrari, he has servants and maids that obey. Warns his son to stay away from I-10, the major highway in LA and to not change go to fast or too slow as traffic is dangerous and the Ferrari is hard to control.

Pheathon- Pheobus' son, wants to prove to his friends back home in Glendale Arizona that he does fit in with their high rolling lifestyle. He plans to drive the new Ferrari no matter what his dad warns. Is told to not go into the next town as it is dangerous but he secretly plans to go to Glendale. He ends up crashing and a fiery explosion occurs as he went too fast even though his dad warned him. 

Bibliography:
Source Stories- Ovid's Metamorphoses by Tony Kine
    Ovid's Metamorphoses
    -Pheathon and the Sun
    -Pheathon's Ride

Week 1 Story: Not So Foolish Mice

From left to right: Tim, Slim, Me (Jim) Source:Flickr

         Sup, I’m Jim, and I am a farm mice with lots of siblings, however 2 stand out among the rest. Tim and Slim (he’s small for his age) are my brothers and hands down the best of buds. When we were born we narrowly escaped a mousetrap, and as a result we lost our eyesight. Honestly, it’s a pretty sensitive subject and we don’t talk about it much. Now that we are all clear on this let me tell you how my bros and me were BRUTALLY ASSAULTED.

    It all started when the bros and I were out minding our own business relaxing in the hot tub. You see when it rains, the water gathers in a pail that gets warmed up by the heat of the chimney. Did I mention this spa is on the roof? Anyways, being as we can’t see how were we supposed to know we weren’t actually in a hot tub and were mistakenly in a dirty dish in the sink?! I mean come on its an honest mistake. Just because music was playing and it smelled like an apple pie in the heat box doesn’t mean we should have known! So the farmer’s wife ran in on us, who was way rude by the way, and she screamed and grabbed a knife! A KNIFE. All she had to do was politely ask us to leave but no, she had to escalate the situation. Now I can’t speak for my brothers, but I would feel comfortable in saying that our treatment that day was totally uncalled for. Not to get into the details, but she grabbed that knife and now we are not only blind, but also tail-less. So being the strong, tough, noble mice that we are we pulled ourselves together and ran after her!

    You may have heard in the tabloids that we were considered “fools” for this. However, I’m still alive to recount this story so who’s the real fool? I’ll tell you who, THE LADY RUNNING WITH THE KNIFE.

Now don’t get too worried she didn’t die or nothing, there was just a “tragic” fall and the farmer’s wife was injured to the point where working and maintaining a farm was no longer possible and they moved to the city. Now Tim, Slim, and I are praised around the farm as we run this place. So kids, there you have it, the tabloids had it wrong all these years and I wouldn’t believe everything you hear. Except for this. Believe this. 

Authors note: This story is loosely based off of the nursery rhyme, "Three Blind Mice", where 3 blind mice have their tails cut off and chase after the farmers wife, who had cut them off. The nursery rhyme calls them fools for this and the rhyme is repeated.

Bibliography. "Three Blind Mice"  from The Nursery Rhyme Book by Andrew Lang. Source