Improvements :)

Hi!
I first really loved the story planning option. I was a little unclear about the idea that if we did not love our story and the next week we fell in love with one, if we could do that story instead and scratch the other one! If that makes any sense... I never used it to do extra research, more just to plan out and straighten up my thoughts as I would come up with so many ideas the more I planned!

I also liked the idea of the themes! It could be cool to see the whole story of some of the Gods and characters, rather than bits and pieces over many weeks! Maybe it would be cool so if instead of Love Stories, it could be "Zeus" and have all of the stories over him and his life.

I really enjoyed both of these ideas :)

Week 14 Storyplanning

This week I read Eve's Unequal Children by D.L. Ashliman.
-This story is over Adam and Eve with a twist

Adam and Eve Source

-Adam worked the field at the house that they built while Eve gave birth to children every year
-Dang in the story the ugly kids made up 12 of her children!
-Some were beautiful and some were ugly.
-LOL yeah story of my life
-The Lord said he was going to come by for a visit
-Can you imagina how nervous you would be?!
-Eve hid the ugly children and put on display her beautiful children
-The Lord came and blessed the beautiful children with wonderful futures
-Makes sense
-Eve brought in the ugly children to be blessed and the Lord blessed them too
-He blessed the ugly children with poor jobs and futures.
-Poor kids:(
-Eve asked why and the Lord say because everyone has a job to make the world work basically!
-She apologized for questioning his word and the children were stuck with the jobs

For this story, similar to my storybook, I think it would be fun to make this from the Lords perspective or from a child's perspective. I think that it would be good to get it from one of the ugly kids view as they have it harder than the beautiful one! OHHHH IDEA!! I think it would be so fun to write this from the future and have it set at like a family reunion where they all come together later in life and recount this story and how the Lord blessed them all. Then we could see how they turned out and I could make the beautiful children unhappy with poor personal lives and the ugly kids have beautiful large families, and loved by all. This would show beauty and money isn't everything, which I think we could all use a lesson on today!

Week 14 Reading Notes Part B

This week I read Eve's Unequal Children by D.L. Ashliman.
-This story is over Adam and Eve with a twist

Adam and Eve Source

-Adam worked the field at the house that they built while Eve gave birth to children every year
-Some were beautiful and some were ugly.
-The Lord said he was going to come by for a visit
-Eve hid the ugly children and put on display her beautiful children
-The Lord came and blessed the beautiful children with wonderful futures
-Eve brought in the ugly children to be blessed and the Lord blessed them too
-He blessed the ugly children with poor jobs and futures.
-Eve asked why and the Lord say because everyone has a job to make the world work basically!
-She apologized for questioning his word and the children were stuck with the jobs

Week 14 Reading Notes

This week I read Rumpelstiltskin by D.L. Ashliman

Shrek and Rumpelstiltskin Source

`A man wanted to impress the king so he lied and said his daughter could spin straw into gold.
`The daughter was taken into a room and she cried because she could not do it
`If she did not do it he said he would kill her
`A little man came in and kept striking up deals with her to the point where she promised to give him her first child
`When she had a kid, he came to collect and he said if she guessed his name she would not have to pay.
`after 3 days of not being able to figure it out she got it right and he killed himself.

Week 13 Story Planning Post: Cinderella! Cinderella!

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane

Cinderella Source

I chose this story as my ALL-TIME favorite princess is Cinderella. I go to Disney around once a year and no matter how many times I go I still get so excited to meet her.

Aschenputtel-German Cinderella
It would be cool to incorporate the German roots
-Cindy's mom died and she went to the grave all the time
In the original we never got to hear from the mother so it could be cool to write this from beyond the grave.
-The new wife had 2 daughters, who were evil and took away Cindy's things
Evil Stepsisters!! In this story they are beautiful though??
-They made her life so hard
-Her dad went out and she asked for the first twig to hit his hat
In the end of this story the dad is not very nice to her so I would make him consistently nice throuhout the story since it doesn't make sense for her dad to hat her.
-She went to her mothers grave and planted the twig so that it would grow
-A bird would grant her wishes while at the grave
How cool is this!! This is like her helpful mice from the original!
-A dance was among them but she was forbidden to go unless she finished chores
-The wishful bird helped her clean
-Then she had nothing nice to wear
I like how in this story it is not that the sisters destroy her clothes, she simply doesn't have any.
-She went to the grave and the bird dropped her a beautiful gown
-She went to the ball and the Prince fell for her
This is where the story gets a little weird...I would stick to the original and have the stepsisters try to make their feet fit, and she can runaway as it is a multi night ball, but not to disappear into the pigeon house!
-She disappeared into the Pigeon House
...To be Continued

Week 13:Extra Reading Notes

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane.
This is the Part 2 of my first notes.

Cinderella Source

On the 3rd day Cindy went to her mothers grave again and asked for a beautiful dress.
The bird gave it to her and the prince told everyone that she was with him.
She ran away at midnight and he put sticky stuff on the stairs
Her shoe stuck to the floor and so he picked it up
The mom made the 2 evil stepsisters cut off parts of their feet to fit in the shoe.
The prince saw the blood and said they were not the right girl.
He went back and the father said that he had one other daughter but she was gross
The prince insisted and the shoe fit!
They went off and at the wedding the birds poked out the stepsisters eyes!

Week 13 Reading Notes

This week I decided to write over Aschenputtel by Lucy Crane

Cinderella Source

I chose this story as my ALL-TIME favorite princess is Cinderella. I go to Disney around once a year and no matter how many times I go I still get so excited to meet her.

Aschenputtel-German Cinderella
-Cindy's mom died and she went to the grave all the time
-The new wife had 2 daughters, who were evil and took away Cindy's things
-They made her life so hard
-Her dad went out and she asked for the first twig to hit his hat
-She went to her mothers grave and planted the twig so that it would grow
-A bird would grant her wishes while at the grave
-A dance was among them but she was forbidden to go unless she finished chores
-The wishful bird helped her clean
-Then she had nothing nice to wear
-She went to the grave and the bird dropped her a beautiful gown
-She went to the ball and the Prince fell for her
-She disappeared into the Pigeon House
...To be Continued